Often when I visit
the hills or a
pristine beach
for a mini vacation
I end up saying
that life would
be much better
there, and how I
wish to make a shift
sooner or later.
Then why does a
long stay
at the same pretty
place, reminds me
of the concrete and
clutter, which are
clutter, which are
functional body parts
of where I have lived
since forever. Why do
I begin to miss the
place I have shrewdly
criticized all my life
for a million reasons?
It is as if a part of
me is always there-
shining with the
T3 lights,
even at midnight
Moving through
the spiteful summer air.
even at midnight
Moving through
the spiteful summer air.
Gorging away to glory,
Golgappas and kulfi
Chattering and
Golgappas and kulfi
Chattering and
adding to the prevalent
noise pollution.
Star trekkin’
through the night smog.
through the night smog.
That part of me
turns on the ignition
of a vehicle
called saudade
on which I race
back home
because
on which I race
back home
because
at the end of the
day it is easier
said than done.
[1] (Portuguese) meaning love that remains. (especially with reference to songs or poetry) a feeling of longing, melancholy, or nostalgia
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ReplyDeleteThe feeling expressed here resonate with mine. :D
ReplyDeleteI loved how you waft in the hot summer loo and star gaze "smog coated
nocturnal sky". And the last stanza is well crafted.
If you break "Then why does a prolonged stay" at "why" instead of "a", it might feel stronger but then it will disturb the line length.
Overall, its a beautiful city poem.
I really like the way you have conveyed the emotion of longing for home. Smooth...
ReplyDeleteSimplistic yet it captures the feeling so well. The second verse particularly is true to the spirit of the poem.
ReplyDeleteI would only like more verses and more detail about home and with your skills it will not just make the piece better but also pose a challenge to you.
I like the second stanza.
ReplyDeleteOverall, the poem could be made stronger by adding embellishments which give reader a sense of poet's city rather than just another city.